Many writers, beginning and experienced, often inflate their sentences with unnecessary words, but strong writing is not complicated or wordy writing. Good writing is tight, concise, and to the point. Inflating your writing with superfluous words will lead to confusion in not only your sentences, but can also lead to a confusing message in your essay. Read on to learn how to tighten your writing and improve your sentences.
Eliminate Wordy Phrases
One of the easiest fixes to tighten your writing is to eliminate wordy phrases. Read over your essay to see if a wordy phrase can be reduced to a word or two without changing the meaning:
At the present time Today our business has no deficit.
The end result is tragic if a patient is not treated swiftly.
The final outcome will be difficult to determine.
Because of the fact that NASA has cut funding, the space missions are in jeopardy.
Eliminate Empty or Meaningless Words
Read each sentence carefully to locate words that offer no essential information to a sentence. Some of the most common empty words in student essays are very, really, and definitely.
They were really trying hard to get the bill passed.
The paper was very interesting.
The research definitely shows that meditation reduces stress.
If you find you use very or really a little too frequently, it’s often a sign that the sentence needs to be rewritten with stronger language. Note the changes in the revised sentence below:
They were struggling to get the bill passed.
The paper was fascinating.
The research confirms that meditation reduces stress.
Omit “It is” Constructions
One of the most common sentence constructions found in student writing is beginning a sentence with “It is” or “There are,” both of which create a subject-less, and often confusing, sentence. Look at the sentences below and consider what the “it is” might be referring to:
It is possible that the cause of her headaches is stress.
Revised: The cause of her headaches is stress.
It is worth pointing out that both governors were incorrect.
Revised: Note that both governors were incorrect.
It is clear that research supports his findings.
Revised: Clearly the research supports his findings.
It is often the case that initial experiments fail to prove anything.
Revised: Often initial experiments fail to prove anything.
Tighten sentences beginning with “There are” to clarify meaning and improve style by locating the real subject of the sentence. Below, the real subject of the sentences is underlined:
There are numerous reports of widespread corruption.
Revised: Numerous reports suggest widespread corruption.
There are only two questions left to answer.
Two questions are left to answer.
There are numerous studies that show the opposite is true.
Numerous studies show the opposite is true.
Before you turn in your final draft, take some time to work on eliminating any redundant, excessive, or unnecessary words or language from your sentences. Your ideas will communicate more clearly, writing will flow more smoothly, which means your ideas will be taken more seriously.